The bar chart illustrates the weekly expenses of families in one particular country in 1968 and 2018. Overall, there was a clear shift in family spending over the 50-year period. In 1968, the largest portion of the weekly budget went to food, but by 2018, housing became the biggest expenditure. While the percentage spent on food and transport decreased, there was a noticeable increase in spending on leisure, healthcare, and education. In 1968, families spent 35% of their weekly income on food, followed by housing at 25%. Other categories like transport and education received smaller shares, at 15% and 5%, respectively. By 2018, however, housing took up 35% of income, while food expenditure dropped to 20%. There was a significant rise in spending on leisure (from 5% to 18%) and healthcare (from 2% to 8%). Another change was seen in transport, where spending decreased from 15% in 1968 to just 10% in 2018. Education remained relatively stable, with a small increase from 5% to 6%. The proportion spent on other categories, such as clothing and footwear, showed only minor changes over the years.

The bar chart shows how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.
Overall, there is a clear change in how families spent their money over the 50 years. In 1968, food was the most significant expense, but by 2018, the biggest share went to housing. The percentage spent on food and transport decreased, while spending on leisure, healthcare, and education increased.
In 1968, families spent 35% of their income on food, and 25% on housing. Transport took up 15%, and education was only 5%. By 2018, the proportion spent on housing increased to 35%, and food decreased to 20%. There was a significant rise in the amount spent on leisure, from 5% to 18%, and on healthcare, from 2% to 8%.
Another notable change was in transport, where the percentage dropped from 15% in 1968 to 10% in 2018. Education remained almost the same, increasing only slightly from 5% to 6%. The share for other categories like clothing and footwear also saw small changes, but not as much as the major categories.

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The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and the overall flow of information is smooth.

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Consider using a wider range of linking words or phrases to show more variety.

The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic usage. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors.

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