The bar chart shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000
The bar chart shows how the amount of energy generated from wind changed in different countries, namely India, Denmark, Germany and the US between 1985 and 2000. Overall, all the countries mentioned saw their energy production from wind increase with the rate of growth being more noticeable in Denmark. Additionally, the US exhibited consistently higher figures during the period with the exception of the final year.
Focusing on the countries with the higher rate of growth. Energy generation in Denmark and India increased from just about 200 mw to nearly 500 mw between 1985 and 1990.This was followed by a further increase to 800 and 1200 mw in the 1995.By 2000,there is a little difference between the amount of energy in Denmark and India,the former accounted for 1200 mw, the figure for the latter was 1600 mw.
The US and Germany, on the other hand, displayed relatively smaller rate of changes. The US began at 1200 mw, while figure for second country a mere 400 mw.The amount of energy that produced in US increased further in 1990,reaching 1600,the figure being a peak level during the whole period.Despite increasing noticeably , production of energy in US fell slightly to about 1500 mw in the last year. In1995, Germany produced just under 800 mw, a figure that then rose minimally to around 900 mw in 2000.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The information is sequenced in a way that makes the comparison between the countries and the time periods easy to follow. However, there are a few areas where the use of cohesive devices could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to make the relationships between ideas clearer.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to that topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where the sentence structure could be improved for greater clarity.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the bar chart. The key features and trends are identified and described effectively. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more precise comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details and make more precise comparisons when describing the data.