The bar chart shows the average of hours per week that men and women spend doing activities around the home.
The bar chart illustrates how many hours per week men and women, on average, spend on various household activities.
Overall, men spend more hours per week surfing the internet and watching television more than women in the period of time, while, men more less with cleaning against to women. Women spent most their time with cooking whereas the least amount of hours used gardening.
In terms of hours at men watching television come top of the list, with equal around 14. Surfing the internet and cooking are the next chores 12 to 9 respectively. This was following by washing up constituting 7, just ahead of reading and cleaning the house, not nearly as popular, with just 6 and 5 respectively. Bottom of the chart was gardening which were purchased in the amount of 2.
When it comes to women cooking is also the number-one, with just over 15. Watching television is second, at around 12. Ranked in third place was washing up, with just over 7.
Reading come next, with just ahead of 5. Next came cleaning the house and surfing the internet with around 5 and 4 respectively. The lest popular activity for women is gardening approximately 1.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies and the word choice could be improved in some places.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors in grammar and punctuation, but these do not impede communication.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed comparisons and by clearly identifying trends.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons and trends.
- Make sure to clearly identify trends over time or across categories.