The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015
The bar chart illustrates the number of divorce in Finland and Sweden between 2011 and 2015.
Overall, the percentage of diverse more higher from Sweden than Finland. In 2012, the range of divorce picked up from Sweden as well as from Finland showed to lowest point from whole period. At the end of period rate of divorce change between countries.
At the beginning the number of divorce in Finland was 38%. The next year data about divorce going down by 4%-5%, and this indicator was lowest from two countries from all period. After 2021, the rate of divorce started increase to 39% in 2013, and in 2014 overtook 40%. At the end of period this indicator didn’t change.
In 2011, from Sweden divorce rate was 42%. The number of divorce straightly increased to close to 50% and the rank of between from different countries had by 17%. In 2012, the data(49%) about divorce was highest for all period. The next years, data started slightly going down first of all to 47% in 2013. In 2014, decreasing trend saved and indicator dropped to 45%. Sweden showed lowest data(37%) from all periods.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and/or more complex vocabulary. However, there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrases that reduce the overall effectiveness of the essay.
The essay makes use of a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a variety of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that reduce the overall clarity and effectiveness of the essay.
The essay provides an overview of the information presented in the bar chart and makes some comparisons. However, the essay does not provide enough detail in some areas and there are some inaccuracies in the information presented.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed information and make more accurate comparisons.
- Ensure that all information presented is directly relevant to the task.