The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years compared with the European average.
The given bar chart highlights information regarding how many cars were owned by per 1000 people in 5 countries in Europe in comparison to European average in three distinctive years 2005, 2009, and 2015.
Overall, it is clear that in countries 3, 5 and the average of all 5 countries, there were significant mixed trends, while the rest of the countries experienced stable changes.
Focusing on bigger changes first, country 3 had approximately 700 vehicles for every 1000 people in 2005, and this was followed by an exponential fall to sharp 600 cars in 2009. After this, there was another slight drop to just under 600. On the other hand, starting at about 900 cars in 2005, the car ownership in the country 5 saw a marginal drop the following given year. Despite this decrease, the figure went up in 2015, reaching its staggering almost 1000. Much similarly, the possession of car by per 1000 people for average of 5 countries started at roughly 700 in 2005, a figure that then slightly fell in 2009 before growing to just under 800 in the final year.
When it comes to rather stable changes, out of 1000 people in country 1, there were 300 cars in the first given year and this was followed by a noticeable augmentation to 400 in 2009; however, this number returned to the same 300 in 2015. As for the car ownership in country 2, there were not any big changes reported, only fluctuation around 500. Most interestingly, in country 5, the figure for car ownership remained unchanged throughout the whole period given.
The essay presents information in a logical order, but some parts lack clarity and precision. Transitions between ideas are present but could be more effective.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between paragraphs.
- Ensure consistency in describing trends.
- Avoid repetition in descriptions.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety. Some phrases are repetitive or awkwardly constructed.
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors that affect understanding.
The essay addresses the task and provides a good overview of the data. However, some details are inaccurately reported.
Suggestions
- Ensure accuracy in data description.
- Provide a more balanced overview of all countries.