The bar chart shows the percentage of preference among young people in terms of transport
The bar chart illustrates the preferences for three modes of transport (cars, motorcycles, and bicycles) among young people in four countries: the UK, the United States, France, and Italy.
Overall, cars are the most preferred mode of transport among young people in all four countries, with the highest proportion seen in Italy. By contrast, motorcycles are the least popular choice in most nations, while bicycles are relatively more popular in France and the UK.
In the UK and the United States, the preference for cars is significantly high, with around 60% of young people choosing them in both countries. However, the use of bicycles is relatively higher in the UK (approximately 30%) compared to the United States (about 10%). Meanwhile, motorcycles account for a small fraction of preferences in these two nations, standing at roughly 10% in both.
France and Italy also show a strong preference for cars, with Italy reaching a peak of about 70%. In contrast, the proportion of young people favoring bicycles is notable in France, at nearly 40%, making it the second most popular mode of transport there. Motorcycles remain the least preferred choice across these two countries, with figures below 10%.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and the progression from one idea to the next is smooth.
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The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The vocabulary is used appropriately with only minor errors.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. Those that do exist are ‘slips’ and do not impede communication.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The essay also presents detailed and accurate information.
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- The essay could be improved by providing a more detailed comparison of the data.