The bar chart shows the percentage of young people in higher education in 2000, 2005 and 2010.
The bar graph shows changes in the proportion of young people in higher education in 4 countries in the years 2000, 2005, and 2010. Overall, it is clear that all the given countries exhibited a growth in the proportion of students, except country B whose figure remained the same over the period. Notably, the figures for country A and country B followed a similar upward trend, with the former seeing the most significant rise.
Focusing on the countries with similar patterns first, in 2000 around 35 percent of young people were getting higher education in country A, compared to about 45 percent in country D. Then, both countries experienced a growth as the figure for country A rose to about 48 percent in 2005 and then to about 57 percent in 2010, and that for country D went through a stable rise, reaching 50 percent in 2005 and a staggering 60 percent in 2010.
The remaining countries, on the other hand, recorded minimal changes. Starting at just above 40 percent, the proportion of young people involved in higher education climbed to about 47 percent in 2005 and remained unchanged until 2010. In contrast, the figure for country B remained the same at 40 percent by the end of the period, despite a minimal dip by about 2 percent in 2005.
The essay is generally well-organized, with a clear structure and logical flow. The use of linking words helps guide the reader through the information, though some areas could benefit from more explicit connections.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words for clarity.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Consider summarizing key points.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary. Some phrases are repeated, and there is room for more varied expressions.
The essay displays a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors. Sentences are mostly accurate and varied in structure.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the main trends. Specific data is included to support the descriptions.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data from the chart is accurately described.
- Provide a brief conclusion summarizing the main points.