The bar chart shows the unemployment rate of women in the countries of the UK.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of unemployed women in England, Wales, Scotland, and Northern Ireland for the years 2013 and 2014.
Overall, the majority of the UK regions saw a decline in female unemployment, with Scotland being the only country where the rate increased. Among all four regions, Northern Ireland experienced the most significant drop in joblessness, while the change in England was minimal.
In 2013, England had the highest proportion of unemployed women at 6.8%, which saw a slight reduction to 6.5% in 2014. A similar downward trend was observed in Wales, where the unemployment rate for women fell from 5.4% to 5.0%. Northern Ireland recorded the most substantial decrease, with a drop from 5.6% in 2013 to 4.6% the following year—a full percentage point reduction.
By contrast, Scotland was the only region where female unemployment increased. The percentage of jobless women rose from 6.1% in 2013 to 6.7% in 2014, making it the second-highest rate among the four countries in the latter year, just behind England.
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