The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart illustrates the weekly expenses of families in one particular country in 1968 and 2018.
Overall, there was a clear shift in family spending over the 50-year period. In 1968, the largest portion of the weekly budget went to food, but by 2018, housing became the biggest expenditure. While the percentage spent on food and transport decreased, there was a noticeable increase in spending on leisure, healthcare, and education.
In 1968, families spent 35% of their weekly income on food, followed by housing at 25%. Other categories like transport and education received smaller shares, at 15% and 5%, respectively. By 2018, however, housing took up 35% of income, while food expenditure dropped to 20%. There was a significant rise in spending on leisure (from 5% to 18%) and healthcare (from 2% to 8%).
Another change was seen in transport, where spending decreased from 15% in 1968 to just 10% in 2018. Education remained relatively stable, with a small increase from 5% to 6%. The proportion spent on other categories, such as clothing and footwear, showed only minor changes over the years.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the trends, and there is good use of cohesive devices to link the different parts of the essay.
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The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The words and phrases are used appropriately and accurately.
The essay uses a wide range of structures and there are few grammatical errors. Those that do exist do not impede communication.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the information presented in the bar chart. The writer highlights the key features and presents a clear overview of the trends.
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