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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The proportions of weekly income in families, which were spent on eight distinct expenditure categories in two distinct years, 1968 and 2018, are shown in the bar graph. There is no specifications about the country, the information gathered in.
Overall, the larger shares of the weekly income was allocated to food, fuel and power, clothing and footwear, personal goods in 1968 than in 2018, while housing, transport and leisure took more in the latter year. The figures for the food, leisure and housing were not only the ones with largest percentages, but also experienced the most marked change which in this term also involves transport, clothing and footwear. The expenses on household goods took the same proportion from the budget in both years.
In 1968, 35% of weekly earnings of the families were spent on food, which is the largest expenditure among the categories. Yet, this figure halved in 50 years time, being the third largest in the year. All other expenses did not took more than 20% in the first year, among which energy consumption, shopping for clothes, shoes and personal items showed decline in the proportions in 2018 from 6%, 10%, 8% to 4%, 5%, 4% respectively.
10% of the weekly budget was allocated to accommodation in 1968, which almost doubled in 2018. Families spent on leisure purposes the less in the first year, however more than doubled and outgrew that of housing in the later year. Expenditures on transport also experienced a considerable rise from 8% to 14%. Households items is the sole category, which stood at 8% in the both years.

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The essay presents information in a logical order, but some transitions between ideas are unclear. The overall structure is mostly effective, though some sentences could be connected more smoothly.

Suggestions
  • Use more linking words to connect ideas.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
  • Avoid abrupt shifts between topics.

The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, but some word choices are awkward or incorrect. There is an attempt to use a range of vocabulary.

The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but there are frequent errors in sentence construction and verb forms.

The essay addresses the task and includes key features of the data. However, some comparisons are unclear or not fully developed.

Suggestions
  • Provide clearer comparisons between the years.
  • Ensure all main features are highlighted.
  • Avoid unnecessary repetition.