The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the percentages of weekly income how spent by families in one country during the 50 years
Overall, in the 1968 families spent on food 3 times more than other categories, however in 2018 the categories little bit balanced.
Families in 2018 spent on food 35 percentage of their weekly income which is the most percentage among other categories and the lowest was fuel and power with 6 percentage of income. Families paid corresponding, 10, percentage to housing and clothing, footware, whereas leisure activities required a bit little,9, than the categories. Household, personal goods and transport also required correspondent 7 percentage of income
In the 2018 the highest percentage was 22 and belonged to the category leisure, whereas the lowest was fuel and power as 1968, but with 4 percentage, in addition personal goods was with 4 percentage. In contrast 1968 the percentage of food was decreased by 2 times to 17 also clothing and footware decreased by 2 times. Housing expenses reversal to food increased almost by 2 times, to 19. Families paid on transport 14 percentage. Household goods remained same as 1968
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