The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart shows the average weekly income which was spent by families in a particular country in two separate years: 1968 and 2018.
Overall, families allocated most of their money for food in the former year, while in the latter year, leisure had been the category that families spent more weekly income on. Of particular note is that the category of household goods remained constant throughout the period irrespective of other figures fluctuations.
Examining the categories that showed an upward trend initially, leisure was an outlier. In 1968, families spent 10 percent of their weekly income on housing, which subsequently increased to just under 20 percent in 2018. While household families allocated less than 10% of their weekly spending on both transport and leisure categories in 1968, they showed dissimilar increases at the end of the span, with the figure for leisure rising to 23 percent and surpassing that of transport (15 percent).
With regard to figures that experienced a decrease, families allocated 35% of their weekly income to food, making it the highest expenditure category in 2018. However, this figure dropped sharply to 17 percent in 2018, making other categories show higher percentages compared to food. Fuel and power, clothing and footwear, and personal goods were the figures that received different percentages of income, but showed decreases to similar proportions (three of them were 5%). Interestingly, expenditure on household goods remained constant in both periods.
The essay is generally well-organized with clear comparisons and contrasts between the years 1968 and 2018. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words for better flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary with some precision. There is some repetition, but overall, the vocabulary is appropriate for the task.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors. The structures are generally accurate and appropriate.
The essay effectively addresses the task, summarizing and comparing the main features of the chart. It provides a clear overview and relevant details.