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The Chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city center from 2003-2012.

The Given chart display proportion of information about the shifts in three diffferent zones of crime in manchester city centre between 2003 to 2012.
Ovarall, the given proportion of information burqlary seems to descending trend continously till the date 2008 and remain contant to remaining years.car theft seems zigzag trend throught the years.where as robbery seems unifrom trend throught the years.Burqlary have the peak pointand robbery have the lowest point in given information.
In terms of crimes crimer offen choose to crime in the yeras 2003 to 2004 was burqlary around 3600 in the manchester city center.often crimer choose the eassy way by the years pass the burqlary its decrease the crime rate till the year 2008 its minimize 3600 to 1100 and in remaing years its have a uniform crime rate. car theft often crimer choose to have a less perference than burqlary about 2400 in frisr years and often remain constant till the years 2008 and constanly increase throught out the yaer.
on,the other hand robbery looks like very risky in manchester city center so that cimers have a less instered in robbery so that in fristy year its 500 hundred and have very less incresed in 2005.but graudually came to its initial ways that is unifrom through out the year.

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The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression. The ideas are not well-connected, making it difficult to follow the information.

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The essay uses limited vocabulary with several spelling errors and lacks precision in word choice.

There are frequent grammatical errors, affecting comprehension. Sentence structures are repetitive and lack complexity.

The essay attempts to describe the chart but lacks clarity and fails to accurately convey the main trends and comparisons.

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