The chart below shows the number of films produced five countries in three years.
The biography illustrates the number of movies created in five different countries in three years.
Overall, country A had the highest number of films produced. Notably, the country A and B witnessed a decline, while the reverse was true in the case of B, C, and E.
Delving into details, the number of films that produced country A accounted for about 87, and after a year, this figure leveled off at this point. However, in 2009, this rate experienced a slight decrease by 7 from 87 to 80. Starting at roughly 15 movies in 2007, the number of films released by country B fell to just under 10 in 2008 and rebounded to 12 in 2009.
As regards for country B, the figure for 2007 and 2008 years manufactured almost the same movies, constituting 50 and 51, respectively. By 2009, this country increased gradually until reaching its 70, likewise, despite spending it only on the 10 films in 2007. The number of movies made by country C witnessed a steady growth to 18 movies by 2009. In respect of country E, this figure rose slightly from just below 10 in 2007 to about 12 in the final year.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few awkward or incorrect word choices.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few awkward or incorrect sentences that affect the overall quality of the writing.
The essay provides a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages, and the information is accurately and appropriately selected and clearly and logically presented.
Suggestions
- Make sure to fully and accurately address all parts of the task.
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data and make more specific comparisons.