The chart below shows the number of four different species of fish between 1982 and 2007
The line graph shows changes in the number of four various kinds of fish worldwide from 1982 to 2007. Overall, the numbers for Atlantic Cod and Yellow fin Tuna decreased significantly over the period, while Haddock and Swordfish exhibited a more stable trend with their figures levelling off. Despite some fluctuations, Atlantic Cod and Yellow fin Tuna consistently had higher numbers compared to the other fish species
Atlantic Cod and Yellow fin tuna bore certain parallels in that both exhibited fluctuating patterns during the period. In 1982, the number of Atlantic Cod started at 225000, a figure that then dropped noticeably to 150000 , after which it improved further to 175000, before declining to 125000. While, Yellow fin tuna accounted for 150000 initially, and it increased noticeably, reaching 200000 and this was followed by a constant decrease to 100000 at the end of the period.
The pattern of change for the other two kinds of fish were more or less the same. In 1992, Haddock represented 75000, dramatically more than swordfish, at 10000. Throughout the period this difference remained unchanged .
The essay is logically structured, with clear comparisons and contrasts between the fish species. However, transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, but there is room for more precise word choice.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors and inconsistencies.
The essay addresses the task effectively, covering key features and making relevant comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points for Haddock and Swordfish to enhance completeness.