The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015.
The bar chart compares presents the disturbution of US households based on their annual income for the years 2007,2011 and 2015.
It is evident that the figure for salary which $100,000 or more was by far the most increased means of almost 35 million people over the period shown.
It is clear that therw were almost 30 million family who take the salary less than $25,000 per year in 2007. Also, households and their income between $25,000 and $49,999 were increasing while, the number of households earning between $50,000 and $74,999 remained at this level for the rest of period
The essay has a logical flow of information and ideas. However, there are some areas where the use of cohesive devices could be improved for better clarity and coherence.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to show more complex relationships between ideas.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences within the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and/or more complex vocabulary. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation that should be addressed.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that need to be addressed.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and examples.
Suggestions
- Try to provide more specific details and examples to support your main points.