The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport
The bar chart illustrates the amount of journeys which made by kids from one country in 1990 to 2010 to visit and from school using different types of carriage. Overall, some of the biggest result was in walking by 1990 year and the smallest one was car passenger. If we analyze the further side in 2010 the highest amount was in car passenger and the tinies outcome showed cycling.
Starting with upward trend by 2010 year there was a significant effect in car passenger among all of them. However, the consequence in 1990 provided the lowest trend. In walking category, it showed the most lofty achievements, but in 2010 was normally effect to 6. In 1990 cycling and walking with bus were equally almost, the difference between them was 1, but by 2010 there was changes the cycling made up 2 and walking and bus 4. The last one of them in 1990 there was noticeable consequence to 7 and by 2010 there was too distinct achievement to 5.
The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression of ideas. Sentences are disjointed, and there is a lack of clear linking words to guide the reader.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas.
- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
- Provide a clear introduction and conclusion.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary and some words are used inaccurately.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay attempts to describe the data but lacks clarity and precision. Some key features are missing or inaccurately described.
Suggestions
- Include accurate data descriptions.
- Highlight key trends and comparisons.
- Ensure all modes of transport are discussed.