The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
The bar chart gives information about the number of travels made by youngsters which aged from 5 to 12 in one country between 1990 and 2010 to journey from school using variety modes of transport each year. Overall, the physical activity which walking accounted for the highest point in 1990 with just above 12 million, but the car passengers made up about 11 million in 2010. However, the other remaining modes of transport used less compared in both of year.
Looking at the details, walking is popular among other type of transportation. In 1990, it highlighted the highest point with around 12 million, but in 2010, it accounted for 6 million. Another mode of transport, the car passenger, it also recorded the maximum point only in 2010, but in 1990, car passenger used less which 4 million.
The remaining type of transport such as cycling, walking and bus as well as the only bus made up around 6 million respectively in 1990. However, in trips this kind of transportations are used rare in 2010.
The essay provides a basic structure but lacks clarity and logical progression in some parts.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between ideas.
- Maintain consistent terminology.
- Clarify comparisons and contrasts.
The vocabulary is basic and lacks variety, with some incorrect word choices.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some key points are unclear.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data from the chart.
- Ensure all modes of transport are clearly compared.
- Provide a clearer summary of the main trends.