The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday form 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of individuals of the UK using the Internet between 2003 and 2006. Overall, all categories showed an upward trend over the study period. It is also noteworthy that the youngest age group consistently showed higher figures, while the elderly rarely used the Internet.
Young adults and adults showed much higher figures, with people aged 16-24 leading the list at 80% in 2003. This was followed by a notable increase, reaching a chart-high of 100% in 2005. It then declined negligibly to around 90% at the end of the period. The figures for people aged 25-44 and 45-54 stood at 50% and 60% respectively, both showing a consistent growth and eventually reaching 80% in 2006.
The two oldest segment of the population showed the least interest in the Internet. Daily internet usage of 55-64-year-old people started at about 30% in 2003, showing a period of stagnation over the next 2 years. The figure then climbed to a half in 2006. The oldest age bracket ( 65+) comprised a mere 18% active net users in 2004, a figure which went up slightly to 20% in the end.
The essay is logically organized and the information flows well. The introduction, overview, and body paragraphs are clearly structured. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Consider using more varied linking words to connect your ideas.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where the choice of tense is not optimal.
The essay provides a clear overview and detailed information on the task. The information is accurately and appropriately selected and well supported.
Suggestions
- Make sure to fully address all parts of the task and to support your information with appropriate data from the chart.