The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the internet everyday from2003-2006
The bar chart illutrates the proportion of UK adults by age group using the Internet between 2003 and 2006.
Overall, the percentage of internet use grew in all age categories, with 25-44-year-olds seing the biggest change. The reverse was true for the oldest segment of the population. Moreover, while adolescents shaowed the higest proportion of daily internet use, the least Internet consumption was observed among 65+ age demographics.
In detail, the percentage of daily internet use for 16-24 was higher than other age demographics througout the whole period. Starting at 80% in 2003, the figure for the youngest age category remained stable at the same rate for the first two years. A year later, the figure increased to a chart hight of 100%, before dropping slightly to about 90% in 2006. By contrast, the oldest age category exhibited the smallest percentage of daily Internet consumption. Having started at only 0% in 2003, the figure for people who were 65 or over increased dramatically to a fifth.
Focusing on the remaining age demographics, the share of 25-44-year-olds showed a consistent increasefrom about 50% to 80% between 2003 and 2006. Similarly, another gradual increase was seen in the percentage of people aged 45-54 from 2003 to 2006, at 60% and 80% respectively. Finally, the proportion of daily internet consumption among 55-64-year-old people showed a mild fluctuation between approximately 30% and 35% from 2003 to 2005, before showing a significant increase to around 50% in the final year
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The writer uses a range of cohesive devices and transitional phrases effectively. However, there are a few instances where the flow of information could be improved.
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- Consider using more varied transitional phrases to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all information in the paragraph is relevant to that topic.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures and is generally accurate with a few minor errors.
The essay provides a clear overview and detailed analysis of the data. The writer makes appropriate comparisons and trends are clearly identified. However, the writer could improve by providing a more detailed analysis of the data, including reasons for the trends and comparisons between the age groups.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data, including reasons for the trends and comparisons between the age groups.
- Include more specific data from the chart to support your analysis.