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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar graph provides data on the percentage of families who owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales over almost a century, from 1918 to 2011.
Overall, it is evident that the number of households in rental accommodation experienced a significant fall, while the reverse trend happened with households in owned houses.
In 1918, just under 80 percent of families lived in rental flats, whereas over 20 percent of them had their own houses. Until 1939, the percentage of homeowners reached approximately a third and remained unchanged by 1953. Similar changes took place with households in rented accommodation, that is, it declined by almost 10% in 1939 and saw no change by 1953. In 1961, the percentages of families owned a house and rented a flat were over 40% and below 60% respectively. Notably, after ten years the percentages became equal.
Following 1971, the percentage of homeowners witnessed 10% increase per decade until 1991, while the reverse happened to families rented an apartment. Interesting, both figures did not undergo huge changes until 2001. Interestingly, during the last decade, the percentage of households rented accommodation increased to 35 percent, although the one of house owners decreased to 65%.

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The essay is well-organized with a clear progression of ideas. However, some transitions between sentences and paragraphs could be smoother.

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  • Use more varied linking words to improve flow.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary adequately, but there is room for more precise and varied word choices.

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors that affect clarity.

The essay effectively summarizes the main features of the data and makes relevant comparisons. It addresses all parts of the task.

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  • Ensure all relevant data points are accurately mentioned.