The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 and 2008
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK in the given two years(2001 and 2008).
Overall, it can be seen that the highest percentage of all people consuming fruit and vegetables was women, while children accounted for the lowest proportion throughout the period.
Looking at the details, the percentage of women who ate fruit and vegetables started just over 20% to reach a peak almost 35% from 2001 to 2006, prior to decreasing at 30% in 2008. Meanwhile, the proportion of men who ate fruit and vegetables was remained stable approximately 17% between 2001 and 2003 and then it rose to around 28% in 2007 befor falling slightly to about 26% in the final year. Also, the percentage of children who ate fruit and vegetables was remained stable at around 13% from 2001 to 2003 but it increased to 25% in 2007, prior to declining at 24% in the final year
The essay presents a clear overview and follows a logical structure. However, there are some issues with sentence transitions and consistency in tense usage.
Suggestions
- Use consistent tenses throughout.
- Improve transitions between sentences for better flow.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitions.
The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures but contains several errors that affect clarity.
The essay addresses the task and provides an overview of the data. However, some details could be more precise.
Suggestions
- Provide more precise data points.
- Ensure all key trends are clearly described.