The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of people did not go work for several reasons in a particular European country in three different years, 2000, 2005, and 2010. Overall, it is clear that in 2000 many people were unable to go to work due to illness and family responsibilities, but 2005 and 2010 personal needs and unexpected problems were the main barrier that deter them goto work.
In detail, in 2000, 45% of respondents did not go to work because of illness, the figure saw decline 40% and 35% in 2005 and 2010 respectively. As for stress level, initially, it was lower in 2000 and 2005, around 5%, but by 2010 the trend gradually increased to about 13%.
Looking at the personal needs appointments, in 2000, 15% of workers did not go work which was relatively lower compared to 22% in 2005 and 20% in 2010.
As for family responsibilities, in 2005 more than 25% of workers were unable to work but the figure saw decline to around 23%. Considering unexpected problems (transport, weather) 10% of workers did not go work but the figure increased to more than 15% in 2005 and 2010.
The essay presents information in a logical sequence but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions. Some comparisons are made, but the overall structure could be improved for clarity.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas.
- Include more transitional phrases to improve flow.
- Ensure all comparisons are clearly stated.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some phrases are repetitive. There is a need for more varied expressions to convey ideas effectively.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including issues with verb tenses and article usage. These errors affect the overall readability.
The essay addresses the task and summarizes the main features, but it lacks depth in analysis and some details are inaccurately reported.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data is accurately represented.
- Provide more detailed analysis of trends.
- Clarify any ambiguous statements.