The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of people did not go work for several reasons in a particular European country in three different years, 2000, 2005, and 2010. Overall, it is clear that in 2000 many people were unable to go to work due to illness and family responsibilities, but 2005 and 2010 personal needs and unexpected problems were the main barrier that deter them goto work.
In detail, in 2000, 45% of respondents did not go to work because of illness, the figure saw decline 40% and 35% in 2005 and 2010 respectively. As for stress level, initially, it was lower in 2000 and 2005, around 5%, but by 2010 the trend gradually increased to about 13%.
Looking at the personal needs appointments, in 2000, 15% of workers did not go work which was relatively lower compared to 22% in 2005 and 20% in 2010.
As for family responsibilities, in 2005 more than 25% of workers were unable to work but the figure saw decline to around 23%. Considering unexpected problems (transport, weather) 10% of workers did not go work but the figure increased to more than 15% in 2005 and 2010.
The essay presents information in a logical order, but some sentences lack clear connections, affecting the overall flow.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Clarify comparisons between years.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety. Some word choices are repetitive or imprecise.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including verb tense and sentence structure issues.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some data is inaccurately reported.
Suggestions
- Ensure accurate data representation.
- Provide more detailed comparisons.
- Include all relevant data points.