The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010
The bar chart highlights data regarding reasons behind employees’ absence in one anonymous European country in three different years, namely 2000, 2005, and 2010.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that the majority of did not go to work because of illness, while stress was the least significant reason for workers’ absence.
Looking at the details, 45% of survey respondents indicated that they did not go to work due to sickness in 2000, gradually dropping by 5 percent in each following five-year period. As for the people who chose not to go to work for their family responsibilities, their proportion accounted for about 27%, experiencing a drop by approximately 5 percent in 2005 and remaining unchanged in the next half a decade. For personal needs, the proportion of people made up 20%,
The essay provides a general overview and some specific details, but lacks a clear conclusion and full development of all categories.
Suggestions
- Add a conclusion to summarize the findings.
- Ensure all categories from the chart are discussed.
- Use linking words to enhance flow.
The vocabulary is appropriate but lacks variety. Some phrases are repetitive or unclear.
The essay contains some grammatical errors and incomplete sentences that affect clarity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks full development of all data points and a conclusion.
Suggestions
- Include all categories from the chart in the discussion.
- Provide a conclusion summarizing the key points.