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the chart below what anthropolgy graduates from one university did after finishing theri undergradute coures. The table shows the salaries of Anthropoligists in work after 5 years.

The pie chart illustrates five main paths anthropology students followed after gaining their undergraduate diplomas from a university, while the table compares the proportions of earnings they received in their professions after five years of work in different fields.
Overall, it is apparent that full-time workers made up the largest share, followed far behind by part-time workers after completing their undergraduate diploma courses. Other options, such as working part-time while continuing postgraduate studies, full-time postgraduate study, and unemployment, contributed less significantly. Moreover, people working in the government sector earned the highest salaries, followed by those working as freelance consultants.
Students opting for full-time jobs after finishing their undergraduate degree courses accounted for the largest figure at just over half, whereas there was a small disparity between the proportions of part-time workers and unemployed graduates at 15% and 12%, respectively. Graduates who chose full-time postgraduate study and those whose destination was unknown each accounted for 8%, while the remaining 5% represented those who worked part-time while pursuing postgraduate study.
According to the salaries of anthropology graduates after half a decade, private companies paid $25,000โ€“$49,999 to 10% of employees, which was double the proportion in both the government sector and freelance consultancy. An almost similar trend was observed for the $50,000โ€“$74,999 bracket, with private companies taking the lead at 35%. Regarding the $75,000โ€“$99,999 range, freelance consultants dominated at 40%, followed by government workers and private companies at respective shares of 30% and 25%. Finally, in terms of earning $100,000 or more, government employees ranked first at 50%, followed by freelance consultants at 40%, while private companies had the smallest share at 30%.

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The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The writer uses appropriate connectors to link ideas and paragraphs. However, there is some repetition of phrases such as “anthropology graduates” and “graduate students.”

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  • Try to vary your language more to avoid repetition of key terms.
  • Use a wider range of cohesive devices to show more complex relationships between ideas.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there is some repetition of vocabulary such as “anthropology graduates” and “graduate students.”

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there are very few grammatical errors. However, there is some repetition of sentence structures.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. The essay also makes some comparisons where relevant. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed analysis of the data.

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  • Provide more detailed analysis of the data, especially when comparing the different categories.
  • Use a wider range of structures to compare and contrast the data.