The chart provides information about immigration, emigration and net migration in the UK between 1999 and 2008.
The chart provides information about immigration, emigration and net migration in the UK from 1999 to 2008. The unit is measured in thousands.
Overall, both immigration and migration increased, likewise the figure for Net migration fluctuated over the period. However, the figures for immigration were dramatically higher.
Immigration figures grew slightly between 1999 and 2000. In 1999, around 450,000 people came to live in the UK , while the number of people who emigrated stood at just under 300,000 . In contrast, net migration was around 160 000 individuals and it did not change by 2003 . From 1999 to 2004 , the number of immigration rose around 600,000 but there was less rise in emigration. When it comes to net migration peaked at approximately 250,000.
After 2004, the number of immigration level remained high , but the rate of people emigration fluctuated . As a result, emigration figures went down suddenly in 2007 before peaking at about 420,000 individuals in 2008. Similarly the net migration figure increased to approximately 240,000 in 2007 then decreased to around 160,000 in the end of given period .
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a good range of linking words. However, some parts of the essay could be more concise to improve readability.
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- Consider using more varied linking words to show a wider range of language.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few awkward or incorrect word choices.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are error-free. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions that could be improved.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the chart and makes appropriate comparisons where necessary. The key features are identified and supported with relevant data. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the data and making more specific comparisons.
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- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data and make more specific comparisons.