The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
The graph compares the request for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June in three different activities (In person, By letter/email and By telephone)
Overall, it is clear that there was an increase in person, making it dominant during the period, while the figure for Letter/Email were slightly decreased.
In January, in person information request was the lowest figure between three categories at approximately 420, while the telephone information stood at 900 which had been dominant for 3 month afterward the figure for the person showed a significant upward trend, reaching 1900 to finish the period. The telephone request stayed as a second dominant figure, around 1600.
In contrast, letter and email remained relatively stable until March (700), finally, which started drop from March to June, reaching 400.
The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear linking words and transitions. Some sentences are lengthy and could be better organized for clarity.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Break down long sentences for clarity.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary but lacks variety in expressions. Some word choices are inaccurate.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures, affecting clarity and readability.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some data is inaccurately presented.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points from the graph.
- Ensure accuracy in data description.