The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
The graph compares the request for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June in three different activities (In person, By letter/email and By telephone)
Overall, it is clear that there was an increase in person, making it dominant during the period, while the figure for Letter/Email were slightly decreased.
In January, in person information request was the lowest figure between three categories at approximately 420, while the telephone information stood at 900 which had been dominant for 3 month afterward the figure for the person showed a significant upward trend, reaching 1900 to finish the period. The telephone request stayed as a second dominant figure, around 1600.
In contrast, letter and email remained relatively stable until March (700), finally, which started drop from March to June, reaching 400.
The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions between ideas.
Suggestions
- Use paragraphs to separate different trends.
- Add linking words for better flow.
- Clarify comparisons between categories.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay addresses the task and provides a general overview but lacks detailed data analysis.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points to support trends.
- Provide a clearer comparison of the three methods.