The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a University for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK
The two pie charts give data about the main methods of transportation for people travelling to University in the UK in the given two years (2004 and 2009).
Overall, the percentage of people who used car was declined and other categories increased throughout the period.
Looking at the details, the proportion of car users was the highest, 51 per cent, in 2004, but it declined to 28 per cent in 2009.
If we look at the percentage of trains and buses users, the proportion of them accounted for 3 per cent and 33 per cent . After five years, they showed of 1 per cent and 13 per cent increase respectively. Also, the proportion of people who use bicycle was 9 per cent in 2004 and then it made up 7 per cent rise in 2009. Meanwhile, the percentage of walking was 4 per cent in 2004. After five years, it showed by 2 per cent growth in 2009 in the UK.
The essay presents information logically but lacks clear transitions and connections between ideas.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure data is presented consistently.
- Clarify comparisons between years.
The vocabulary used is adequate but lacks variety. Some word choices are awkward or incorrect.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in the analysis and comparison of data.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons.
- Highlight significant trends.
- Ensure all key data points are covered.