the chart shows the number of Austalion students studied from 2004 to 2006
The bar chart gives information about how many students studied in AUSTRALIA between 2004 to 2006
Overall, how many student studied in the USA and NEW ZEALAND was common pattern across the given the prioed While figure for Germany and japan had consistently lower figures
In 2004 approximetly 2700 of students studied in the USA then this number increased slightly at 2800 in 2005 after next year went up
At 2900 in 2006 .Similarly the number of students who studied in NEW ZEALAND accounted for 2650 in 2004 next two years increased double reached at 2750 by 2006
In 2002 the figure for UK made up at 1500 of students ,rising slightly about 1700 by 2005 then next two years remaned chanced about 1600 in2006
The number of students studied in Germany and JAPAN started with below 300 and 350 a later the both fugures accounted for 300 respectevly
The essay has a logical flow of information and ideas. However, there are some unclear connections between sentences and paragraphs.
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The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary but lacks precision in some word choices. There are also several spelling errors that affect the readability of the text.
The essay has a mix of complex and simple sentence forms, but there are several grammatical errors that hinder understanding.
The essay generally addresses the task requirements, providing an overview of the data and making some comparisons. However, the task could be more fully covered by analysing the data in more detail and making more specific comparisons.
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