The chart shows the percentage of car manufacturer's total sales in North America, South America, Asia and Europe.
The bar chart provides data about the percentage of an automaker’s turnover in four continents—North and South America, Asia, and Europe—over five consecutive years, beginning in 2006.
Overall, it is evident that while the proportion of cars sold in Asia rose considerably, the reverse was the case in South America. Additionally, the two remaining continents witnessed a period of relative stability over the given period.
In 2006, 30 percent of cars were sold in Asia and 30 percent in Europe, respectively, just 1 percent higher than in South America. The car sales in North America made up by far the lowest proportion at only 11 percent. Two years later, the percentage of cars sold in Asia and Europe rose moderately, with Europe’s sales increasing to 39 percent.
By 2010, Asia had undergone a dramatic increase, soaring to reach 50 percent, while sales in South America declined to 20 percent compared to 2006. In 2006, the figure stood at 11percent, and although it gradually started to decrease throughout 2007, 2008, and 2009, it ultimately returned to 11 percentby the end of 2010.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the main trends observed in the chart. The information is sequenced in a way that makes the progression of events easy to follow, and there is effective use of cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words or phrases to show more variety in your language use.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
The essay makes use of a variety of complex structures, and the majority of sentences are error-free. However, there are a few minor errors that do not impede communication.
The essay provides a clear overview and detailed information on the trends and changes in the data. The task is well addressed, and the information is presented in a logical and coherent manner.
Suggestions
- Ensure that all data points are clearly referenced and explained.