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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

The illustration provides daily average calorie intake in the US over particular period with categorization of consumption among distinct food categories.
Overall calor intake grew remarkably, with considerable changes in food classifications over 1970 1990 and 2010.
Additionally, classifications such as meat x and nuts along with added fat, so marginally grow. Meanwhile, vegetable end dairy had notable decrease. Fruits remained at gradual stability with meager motification.
In some worried, there had been noticed that meat eggs and nuts saw notable climb in average among of 465 to 455 and gradually increased to 480 in the years 1970, 1992 and 2010.
Alongside grains, which progressively grew through years begin with 430 to 575 and in 2010 overall reached to 625 calories. Furthermore, the significance surge maintained added sugar and fat, showing huge amount of contribution to total amounts of calories.
However, some categories of calories showed rapid changes. It could be viewed that dairy showed a slight increase, beginning with 265 continuing, with slowly falling 260 and overall dropped to 255 in 2010. Similarly, with vegetables which decline it slightly without huge changes through years compared to earlier period of time.
Additionally, minimal changes could be seen in category of fruits, starting with gradual increase and over that time pass remained unchanged.
In total, it is clear from data that over the period calorie intake showed incredible increase in contrast to earlier years.
In conclusion, the graph provides marginally climb in daily calorie intake in the US with notable grow in classifications of meat, eggs and nuts. Add fat and sugar grains. While another category show drops such as dairy and vegetable over period of time.

5.0

The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.

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  • Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
  • Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrases that could be improved.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there are some errors in grammar and punctuation. However, the errors do not generally impede communication.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and provides a generally detailed and accurate description of the data. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more thorough analysis of the data and by making more specific comparisons.

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  • Provide a more thorough analysis of the data and make more specific comparisons.
  • Consider the implications of the data and provide a deeper analysis.