the chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
The bar chart compares the number of kilometers, measured in billions, travelled by using five different modes of transportation in the UK in 1990 and 2000.
By far the most popular types of transportation were busses and rail in both years with similar figures. In 2000, they accounted for a little less than 50 billion each, up from their respective figures of approximately 46 and 45 billion a decade ago. Also, the figure for the total distance increased from nearly 105 to 112 billion between the years.
In contrast, the remainder modes of transportation –bikes, motorcycle, and air –never reached above the 10 billion mark. Both three had relatively similar numbers in 1990, making up around 8 billion of the total. By 2000, however, while the figures for bicycle and motorbike saw a slight decline, that for air rose only marginally.
Overall, with the highest number of kilometers covered in both years, busses and rail saw an increasing trend, while the three other types remained less popular among the UK travelers.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The writer uses appropriate cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The writer uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information and makes appropriate comparisons where necessary. The key features are identified and supported with relevant data. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed analysis and explanation.
Suggestions
- Try to provide a more detailed analysis and explanation of the data. This could involve discussing the reasons for the popularity of certain modes of transportation, or the implications of the data.