The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Given are two figures comparing information on the location and types of dance classes for young people in a town located in Australia.
Overall, private studios are the most popular dance classes, while tap has the most participation among all types of dance classes.
In terms of location, private studios are the most favored, approximately 48% of dance classes. After that are school halls (after-school), which organize 24% of classes. Community halls and other sites constitute 18%, while college-based studios are about 10% of all locations. These data illustrate that private studios have the largest audience compared with other dance class locations.
As to types of dance classes, ballet has the most students under 11 years old, approximately 600 people, while modern dance classes have the fewest, about 300 people. In addition, modern classes are the most popular type of dance with about 530 students in the age range 11 to 16 years old, while ballet classes are the least favored in these ages
The essay is logically organized and the information flows well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there are very few grammatical errors.
The essay provides a clear overview and detailed information on all the points presented in the charts. The information is accurately and appropriately selected and well supported.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you fully understand the information presented in the charts and that you accurately report on it.
- Make sure that you fully address all parts of the task.