The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the different locations of dance classes and each of their proportion, and the bar chart shows the age groups of the attendants and types of the dance courses in a town in Australia.
Overall, while nearly half of the classes are held at private studios, college-based studios have a 10 percent share. Although, ballet is the most popular dance course among younger ones, it is not popular among older children between 11 to 16. For these group, modern dance is the favorite dance course.
Near the half of the dance courses are held at private studios with 48 percent. Additionally, Approximately one-fourth of the classes are at school halls after the school classes are ended. community halls and other are represented for 18 percent of the classes while college base studios has the least amount with only 10 percent.
Moreover, among under 11 years old, ballet is the most popular dance class with near 600 students. In the second place comes tap dance and the least popular is modern dance with 600. Conversely, for older children this is quite opposite. While modern is the most popular course with over 500 dancers, ballet is the least popular with only 300 attendants. Additionally, tap dance is a course that has approximately same number of visitor in both categories
The essay generally follows a logical structure with clear paragraphing, but there are occasional lapses in cohesion and coherence.
Suggestions
- Improve transitions between sentences and ideas.
- Clarify comparisons and contrasts more explicitly.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitions.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses the task and summarizes the main features, but lacks detailed comparisons and some inaccuracies are present.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between age groups and dance types.
- Ensure accuracy in reporting data from the charts.