The charts below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1978 and in 2018
The table as well as bar charts shows police budget in 2017 and 2018 in single area of Britain the table illustrates where money came from such as the bar charts display how it was allocated.Overall National governments were their largest donor in both years and local taxes were second main supporters in both years policies were spent money with salaries Technologies and buildings as well as transports they spent large amount of money the budget mainly on the officers and staff salaries,however they spent the least amount of budget on technology.
Mainly the police budget came from two different ways first one is National governments they were gave 175.5 million pound in 2017 and 1 year later the budget increased 177.8 million pound in 2017 the amount coming from local taxes was 91.2 million pound and in 2018 this amount was significantly increased about 102.3 million pound as well as other sources for example grants and so one in 2018 they were gave 38 million pound and the next years it was increased 0.5 million pound.Total budget in 2017 was 304.7 million pound and 318.6 million pound in 2018.
In 2017 is a spent money for salaries was 75% and the following year they budgeted for 6% less for salaries.they spent the same 17% on buildings and transportation in both years also they spent the money for technology only 8% in 2017 as well as the following year this proportion was increased 6%
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear central topic in each paragraph. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few awkward phrases and some of the vocabulary is not used accurately.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few awkward phrases that could be rephrased for clarity.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. The essay also makes some comparisons where relevant. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed explanations and by making more comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed explanations of the information presented in the charts and table.
- Make more comparisons between the data to show a deeper understanding of the information.