The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of government expenses on 9 categories ( Education, healthcare, pensions, deference, welfare, interest on borrowing, transport, culture and leisure, and other) in 2010 and 2015.
Overall, it is noticeably seen that the expenditure on transport and interest experienced a modest increase, while the remaining sectors saw a minimal decrease, only the figure for other and culture remained at level.
In 2010, the figures for education, healthcare, pensions, and defence had high proportion of expenses, standing at 24%, 21%, 19%, and 17% respectively. The expenses of transport and interest on borrowing were lower than 10%, whereas the proportion of transport, culture, and other were negligible among the main categories, at 1% to 3%.
In 2015, the percentages of education, healthcare, defence, transport, and culture were slightly lower, at 21%, 20%, 14%, 13%, and 1% consecutively. Other figures like welfare and interest on borrowing almost doubled; nevertheless, the expenditure of culture and others stayed unchanged.
The essay presents information logically but lacks clear linking words and phrases to enhance flow.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure consistent use of categories across the essay.
- Clarify comparisons between the two years.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices are imprecise or repetitive.
The essay demonstrates a good command of grammar but contains minor errors.
The essay addresses the task and includes relevant information but lacks depth in analysis and comparison.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between the two years.
- Include specific data to support claims about changes.
- Clarify the significance of changes in expenditure.