The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.
The pie charts illustrate the distribution of water across the globe, while the bar chart shows the usage of water among the three nations.
Overall, it is clear from the chart that undrinkable water is the biggest proportion, whereas fresh water is the least. According to the table, the vast majority of water is used for agricultural purposes in Egypt and Saudi Arabia, yet Canada uses water mostly for industries.
The first pie chart shows that only 3% of the water is drinkable, but 97% is salt water, which means it is not in use. For example, when it comes to fresh water in the second pie chart, they are divided into three. First, ground water accounts for 20%; however, surface water is unlikely to be 1%; the majority of ice glaciers show 79%.
When it comes to the table, the most usage of water is spent for agricultural purposes, mainly by two countries, showing a mover of 70%. However, domestic and industrial are about 11%. Unlilly Canada uses subsantial amount of money on industry but approximately agricultural purposes and domestic usage.
The essay presents information in a logical order, but there are some coherence issues. Transitions between ideas are not always smooth, and there are some abrupt shifts in topics.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas more smoothly.
- Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single topic.
- Clarify comparisons between countries.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and occasional inaccuracies.
There are several grammatical errors that affect clarity and comprehension.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and contains inaccuracies.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between the countries.
- Ensure accuracy in data representation.
- Include more specific data points to support statements.