The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.
The charts illustrate the allocation of water around the world and the proportion of usage water in Egypt, Saudi Arabia, Canada.
Overall, in pie chart amount of salt water is showed in high amount in All water while, Fresh water, ice , glaciers are showing large proportion of water. In bar chart, two countries mostly used water for Agriculture purpose.
It is clear that, the proportion of salt water is higher than potable water in all water, it is accounting for 92%, and fresh water is just 3% when it comes to fresh water, The ice and Glaceries is outnumbered ,it is 79% while, ground water is around 20 percent and surface water is 1% respectively .
In bar chart, high proportion of water usage is related to agriculture in both nations Egypt and Saudi Arabia about 80 and 75 percent, others also same statistic, Domestic purpose shows around 15 and Industry is below the 10 in both countries. In Canada, usage water for Industry is highest amount, to be specific, it demonstrates below 80%.
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