The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.
The chart illustrate the distribution of the world’s water into salt water and fresh water and explains how water is used in three countries.
Generally, it is showed that, the world’s water is salt water and only a minor percentage is fresh water. Water usage differences between the three countries, with agriculture being the main use in Egypt and Saudi Arabia, while Canada mainly use water for industry.
Most of the world’s water 97% is salt water, while only 3% is fresh water, followed by 20% in ground water. Surface water makes just 1%, which is the smallest proportion.
Water usage varies across the three countries. In Egypt, 80% of water is used for agriculture, while around 10% is used for domestic purposes and even smaller percentage for industry. Similarly, Saudi Arabia uses70% of its water for agriculture, with limited amounts for domestic and industrial purposes. In contrast, Canada shows 80% of its water to industry, while agriculture and domestic use each accounted for about 10%.
The essay presents information in a logical order, but there are some abrupt transitions and lack of clear topic sentences.
Suggestions
- Use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph.
- Ensure smooth transitions between ideas.
- Reorganize content for better flow.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision. Some word choices are repetitive.
There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement and incorrect prepositions.
The essay addresses the task and provides relevant information from the charts, but lacks depth in analysis.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed analysis of the data.
- Include comparisons and contrasts more explicitly.