The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.
The charts below illustrates the amount of the planet’s water as well as the use of water in three different regions.
In general, all world’s water contains considerably higher salt water compared to the fresh water. Additionally, fresh water’s more than half percent is ice and glaciers, and almost quarter of it is ground water. In addition, all countries use their substantial amount of water for agriculture except the Canada.
Firstly, world’s all water includes 2 major source, fresh and salt water. Salt water is notably higher than fresh water with 97% compared to 3%. Moreover, the fresh water’s main factor is ice and glaciers helding the highest amount 79%, as well as ground water is the second largest part with 20%. Finally, the least amount of water is surface water depicts only a minimal fraction.
Secondly, the use of water in various regions. Agricultural is the biggest in two countries ( Egypt and Saudi Arabia) with just under 80%. However, in Canada, industry is the highest, approximately 79%. Furthermore, Domestic usage isn’t high in all countries, between 10 and 20 proportions overall.
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The essay uses a range of vocabulary but includes some inaccuracies and repetitions.
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The essay addresses the task but lacks some detail and clarity in describing the charts.
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