The charts below show the percentage of students at an adult education center taking a various courses offered in 1985 and this year.

The pie charts compare the percentage of students enrolled in various courses at an adult education center in 1985 and the current year.
Overall, there have been noticeable changes in the popularity of the courses over time. While modern languages, fitness and dance, and cookery remain prominent, the demand for IT courses has significantly increased, replacing music appreciation as a category.
In 1985, modern languages were the most popular, accounting for 24% of the total enrollment, followed by fitness and dance at 22%. Cookery and local history made up 14% and 15%, respectively, while art courses had a slightly lower enrollment at 17%. Music appreciation was the least popular, attracting just 8% of students.
In contrast, this year, IT courses dominate with 27%, becoming the most attended category. Fitness and dance have maintained their share at 22%, and cookery has risen to 19%. However, modern languages have seen a decline to 17%, and art courses now account for 15%, showing a slight decrease. Notably, music appreciation is no longer offered.

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The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and the progression from 1985 to the current year is smooth.

Suggestions

Consider using a wider range of linking words or phrases to show more variety.

The vocabulary used is varied and appropriate for the task. There is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.

The essay uses a wide range of structures with full flexibility. There are few grammatical errors, but they do not impede communication.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The information is presented in a logical sequence with clear and relevant details.