The charts below show the percentage of students at an adult education center taking various courses offer in 1985 and this year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make competitions where relevant.
The charts show the proportion of students at an adult education center taking distinct courses which were available in 1985 and in this year. Overall, courses of art and cookery have almost tiny changes, but only fitness and dance remained unchanged. Moreover, two courses, such as music appreciation and local history are eliminated now, and courses of modern languages had the highest figures in 1985, however at the present year the figures declined and in this year most popular course is newly introduced IT course.
In 1985, there were 6 kinds of courses. Course of European common languages like French, German and Spanish has 24%, almost quarter of the students the most students and it was the most popular course in 1985. Fitness and dance had 22% learners and art had 17%. The course where attenders master how to cook meals and course where teachers teach history had a small difference, 14 to 15 respectively. The lowest figure was 8% and it was music appreciation.
In the present year courses where learners can learn about music and history are removed, but education center newly introduced IT course and it became the most popular among the courses, It accounted for more than a quarter of the students. The proportion of students taking cookery increased to 19%. However, the students of art reduced to 15%. The learners of European common languages were decreased to 17%. But attenders of fitness and dance remained unchanged as in 1985.
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The essay uses a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, but there are some awkward phrases and repetitions.
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