The charts illustrate the proportion of students at an adult education center taking diverse courses which were available in 1985 and in this year.
Overall, courses of art and cookery have almost minimal changes, but only fitness and dance remained unchanged. Moreover, two courses, such as music appreciation and local history are eliminated, and modern language courses achieved the highest figures in 1985, however, this year the figures declined and in this year the most popular course is the newly introduced IT course.
In 1985, there were 6 kinds of courses. Course of European common languages like French, German and Spanish has 24%, almost quarter of the students the most students and it was the most popular course in 1985. Fitness and dance had 22% learners and art had 17%. The course where attenders master how to cook meals and course where teachers teach history had a small difference, 14 to 15 respectively. The lowest figure was 8% which was for music appreciation.
In the present year courses in music and history have been removed removed, but education center newly introduced IT course and it became the most popular among the courses, It accounted for more than a quarter of the students. The proportion of students taking cookery increased to 19%. However, the students of art reduced to 15%. The proportion of students taking European languages decreased to 17%. But attenders of fitness and dance remained unchanged as in 1985.

The essay presents the data in a logical manner with some clear comparisons. However, transitions between ideas are occasionally abrupt, and some sentences could be better linked for smoother flow.

Suggestions

Use more linking words to connect ideas.
Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
Avoid repetition of phrases.

The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, with some instances of less precise language. There is an attempt to use a range of vocabulary, though some repetition is present.

The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but there are several errors in sentence construction and verb forms.

The essay addresses the task by summarizing and comparing the main features of the charts. However, some details could be more clearly highlighted or explained.