The charts below show the proportion of holidaymakers using four different types of accommodation in three different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of holidaymakers who used four different types of accommodations in three years: 1988, 1998, and 2008. Overall, what stands out from these charts is that rented apartments were the least common in 1988 and 1998, while staying with family was the most popular means of accommodation in every period.
Focusing on larger numbers first, the proportion of holidaymakers using staying with family to accommodate stood at 52% in 1988 this was followed by a slight increase to 54% in 1998 before falling considerably to 44% by the end of the period. As for the percentage of hotels which were chosen by holiday makers, it accounted for 16% in 1988, after which it rose gradually to 42%, remaining stable in 2008.
When it comes to smaller numbers, holidaymakers used rented apartments the least, which made up 7% in 1988. Having increased slightly to 11% in 1998, the figure then doubled further to 22% in 2008. Regarding the proportion of camping, it stood at 26% at the beginning of the period, after which the figure declined significantly to 13%, before a slight decrease by 1% in 2008.
The essay is logically organized with clear progression. Comparisons are effectively made, and the overall structure is coherent.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Avoid overusing specific phrases.
The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, with occasional repetition. The use of terms is mostly accurate.
The essay displays a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors. Sentence structures are mostly correct and varied.
The essay effectively summarizes the main features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons. It addresses all parts of the task.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data is accurately represented.
- Include more detailed comparisons where applicable.