the charts below show the prorportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages In addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

The pie charts show the percentage of British students at a university in England who could speak other languages besides English in 2000 and 2010. The data compares the differences over ten years.
Overall, fewer students spoke only English in 2010 compared to 2000. At the same time, more students started speaking Spanish and other languages, showing a small improvement in language skills.
In 2000, 20% of students could not speak any other language, but by 2010, this dropped to 10%. Spanish became more popular, with the percentage of students speaking only Spanish increasing from 15% to 20%. On the other hand, the number of students speaking only French or only German stayed the same at 15% and 10%, respectively.
There was also a rise in students who could speak other languages or more than one language. Those who spoke a language not listed grew from 15% to 20%. Similarly, students who could speak two languages increased slightly, from 10% in 2000 to 15% in 2010.
In summary, the charts show that more students learned new languages in 2010 compared to 2000. Fewer people stayed monolingual, and Spanish became the most popular second language

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The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and summary provide a good overview of the data. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.

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Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transitions between ideas.
Consider using more varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.

The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are few grammatical errors, but they do not impede communication.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The essay also provides specific details and examples to support the main points.