The charts compare the proportion of full-time employees with university diplomas and their average salaries from 2004 to 2012. Overall, while the percentage of graduates in the workforce initially grew, it later returned to its starting level. Meanwhile, salaries consistently increased, with maths graduates earning significantly more than others from 2008 onwards. The proportion of maths graduates rose from 80% in 2004 to a peak of 90% in 2006, before gradually falling back to its original level by 2012. Similarly, the percentage of all graduates climbed to 80% by 2008 but declined to 65% by the end of the period. Regarding salaries, maths and all graduates earned comparable amounts initially ($41,000–$43,000). However, from 2008, maths alumni outpaced others, reaching $60,000 in 2012 compared to $51,000 for all graduates. This year marked the largest wage gap between the two groups
The charts compare the proportion of full-time employees with university diplomas and their average salaries from 2004 to 2012. Overall, while the percentage of graduates in the workforce initially grew noticeably, it later returned to its starting level. Meanwhile, salaries consistently increased, with maths graduates earning significantly more than others from 2008 onwards.
The proportion of maths graduates rose notably from 80% in 2004 to a peak of 90% in 2006, before gradually falling back to its original level by 2012. Similarly, the percentage of all graduates climbed steadily to 80% by 2008 but declined to 65% by the end of the period.
Regarding salaries, maths and all graduates earned comparable amounts initially (41,000–43,000 dollars). However, from 2008, maths alumni outpaced others by a notable margin, reaching as much as 60,000 dollars in 2012 compared to 51,000 dollars for all graduates. This year marked the largest wage gap between the two groups.
The essay is generally well-organized, with clear progression and logical structure. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Consider summarizing key points at the end.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with some precise word choices, but there is room for more variety and sophistication.
The essay shows a good range of grammatical structures with few errors, demonstrating control over complex sentences.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and relevant details. Data is accurately reported.