The charts give information about Australian doctors.
The table illustrates the quantity of Australian doctors, while the bar charts compare proportions of them split by gender and birth locations from 1986 to 2006.
Overall, although, share of people born in Australia was higher than those born overseas initially, the figures stood at the same level by the end of the period. Notably, despite moderate decline in the percentage of male doctors, they stayed consistently dominant throughout the period.
Focusing on the table, standing at 23720 in 1986, the figure for the number of Australian doctors rose first to 29060 in 1996, and one more decade later, to the peak of 35450 people.
Turning to the bar charts, the ratio for male doctors declined moderately, while the reverse was true for females. The former accounting for 75% in 1986 dropped by roughly 15% and ended up with 60% in 2006. The latter, on the other hand, experienced the direct opposite of that, increasing from a mere 25% to 39%. Similarly, while the percentage for doctors born in overseas saw a gradual rise from 38% to 50%, those from Australia decreased from 63% to 50%
The essay is well-organized with a clear structure. There is a logical flow of ideas, and the use of linking words is appropriate.
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- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Use more varied linking words to enhance cohesion.
- Avoid abrupt transitions between ideas.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though there is room for more variety.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay effectively addresses the task, summarizing and comparing the data accurately.
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- Include more specific data points for clarity.
- Ensure all aspects of the data are covered.
- Avoid overgeneralization.