The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country.
The vertical bar chart provides information on travel, distance travelled and time taken, meanwhile the horizontal bar chart illustrates the usage of walking/cycling, other transport, public transport as ways of traveling.
Overall, both the distance and the time taken show an upward trend, until the end of the period both sections experienced decreases. The usage of private transport increased and leveled off until the end of the period along with the public transport. In contrast, the percentage of population walking/cycling decreased.
Regarding the travel over time, distance travelled had been steadily increasing from the beginning, reaching 7150 miles travelled; until 2010, when it dropped to 6670 miles, being equally proportional to the time taken. As the distance travelled and time taken are both interconnected, time taken experienced same growing trend, reaching 7140 hours, until it experienced a noticeable decrease in 2010.
In terms of the mode of travel, in 1995, almost a third of the population used walking/cycling as the way to reach their destination, while 62% of people travelled in private transport. Public transport was used only by 9% of people. The usage of private transport had increased to the point of 65% in 2005, which was it’s plateau and the rating levelled off until the end of the period. Public transport had gained popularity; it reached its peak of 11% in 2010 and the percentage didn’t change since. Nevertheless, walking/cycling had decreased by 4% in total. The rating did not experience any changes throughout the period of its last 5 years.
The essay is logically organized but lacks clear linking devices and smooth transitions between ideas.
Suggestions
- Use more cohesive devices to link ideas.
- Improve paragraph structure for clarity.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary accurately but lacks variety in some parts.
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures but contains some errors affecting clarity.
The essay addresses the task effectively but could include more specific data to support claims.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points from the charts.
- Ensure all key features are highlighted.